In which we feel accomplished...

[jesshartley]

Well, I think I have the first chapter of my first non-White Wolf book written. Those who expressed interest in helping with critique should be able to see it. If you did't, but do, write and let me know.

Comments

[justicar.livejournal.com]

Looks good...one minor issue of confusion in context early on where you refer to the girls mom as a good man. Other then that looks good.