ext_349186 ([identity profile] justicar.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] jesshartley 2005-03-03 08:35 am (UTC)

Looks good...one minor issue of confusion in context early on where you refer to the girls mom as a good man. Other then that looks good.
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